My 6 sec animation. Scene A5

My first 6 secs of animation for critique.

Storyboard Feedback 01

My Storyboard for my +45 seconds animation is about a heroine fighting against crime.  She observes two females held hostage by a gang lord and his minions.  She rushes to their aid and clobbers the minions.  Despite her heroic actions a minion shoots at her with a bazooka and the gang lord gets away via helicopter with his captives.

1. Heroin looks over city from atop a building.

2. Scouts area with binoculars

3. Spots Gang lord's car.

4. Car drives up

5. Gang lord, minions and female hostages get out of car.

6. They walk towards the building

7. Heroine dives down towards minions guarding the entrance.

8.  Guards on watch

9. Heroine lands on guards.

10.  Close up of her from behind.  The POV of Gang Lord.

11. She turns head with confidence and determination.  She is ready to kick some butt.

12. View of here outside the building.

13. She kicks her way in shattering the glass doors.

14. She lands and ready stands.

15. She dolphin kick the first minion that approaches her.

16. She is so confident that she will win that it bores her.  Second minion runs after her.

17. She drop kicks him.

18. She uppercuts another one. 

19. He flies to the ceiling.

20. She sees the gang lord with the victims across a bridge.  She begins to chase.

21.  Abruptly a helicopter crashes through the ceiling.

22. The minion in the helicopter shoots a rocket at the heroine.

23. She jumps into the water to escape the explosion.  While the heroine was preoccupied by the diversion, the gang lord escapes into the helicopter

24.  Heroine flails into the air at him.

25. Another frontal shot of her flailing at him.  She vows to destroy him one day.  Camera zooms out further away from her as she flails.